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Old 11-28-2009, 04:23 PM
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How about a story that starts out with the Enterprise crew enjoying a layover at a Starbase 12 in a far part of the galaxy when the Enterprise, with only a skeleton crew aboard, is stolen.

Kirk and crew find themselves stranded and forced to commandeer the only vessel available, a space freighter belonging to a man named Harry Mudd and set off in pursuit.

Mudd tries to sabotage the mission.

Meanwhile Scotty has reviewed Mudd’s logs and has discovered an unaccounted period of time which leads him to believe that something happened to Mudd while enroute from his last destination to Starbase 12.

During Spock’s probe of Mudd’s mind he confirms Mtr Scotts theory but is unable to learn exactly what exactly what happened to him. Mudd’s memory of the incident has been jumbled.

Based on this new information Kirk and crew plot a course to the location that Scotty has derived from the logs. When they arrive they discover another ship of unknown alien design. Kirk, Spock and Scotty board the ship and discover that the alien ship was a transport ship from a distant galaxy that was carrying thousands of stored embryos.

Spock determines that the ship is a seed ship, carrying the last remnants of civilisation that has escaped the destruction of their homeworld. Spock also learns that their world was destroyed by an alien vessel known as “the destroyer of worlds”. Spock learns that the “the destroyer of worlds” has been following the alien ship and has entered this galaxy.

Kirk orders Spock to plot an intercept course based on the aliens vessel known course through the galaxy, believing the aliens aboard the stolen Enterprise will continue their previous course and asks Scotty if he can modify Mudd’s transporters so that they can beam aboard the Enterprise when the time comes.

They finally get close enough to beam aboard the Enterprise and discover a single alien entity known as “the Keeper” who has been entrusted with preserving his race at all costs. Meanwhile the alien ship know as “the destroyer of worlds” appears and attempts to destroy the Enterprise.

Kirk must convince “the Keeper” that his crew means them no harm, regain control of the Enterprise and defeat “the destroyer of worlds” and save a dying race from extinction.
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Old 11-28-2009, 10:21 PM
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Interesting story plot. However I think it fits as a 2-part season kickoff or season ending episodes more than a big screen motion picture...
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Old 11-28-2009, 11:58 PM
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As written some of it is too complicated for a 2 hour movie. The planet killer seems like an obvious TOS lift. No old stories or even old villains... machine or otherwise. There have been enough planet killer Trek stories by now.

Besides... pursue a state of the art ship with a cargo vessel? It might be a bit of a convenient cliche for Trek after 40 years but better to get ahold of a small unfinished fed ship. Or how about a small but older TOS looking ship that some Trekkies long for?

Skeleton crew or not, the 'aliens stealing the ship' thing often didnt work well because one would think someone would take the keys and lock the ship down. At the very least the computer would know whoever is giving it orders would not be recognized. If it was that easy to take a ship there would be some serious organization problems.

Thats was the criticism part. As for the potential part get rid of Mudd entirely for a much tighter story. Insert some other very simple plot device to give a direction where to take Kirk and the gangs ship. The scifi elements are certainly there but make the keeper the only antagonist and more complicated. Make it so that 'at all costs' includes killing.
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Old 11-29-2009, 10:17 AM
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I think that would be cool as a tv series episode what do you think?
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Old 11-29-2009, 08:59 PM
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Sounds great, bump for you.
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Old 12-01-2009, 03:15 AM
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A few things feel 'lifted' from TOS here and I personally am no particular fan of Harry Mudd.

However, if it could be reconcieved so that perhaps simply another ship (Farragut?) takes his place that would involve them more directly.

It shouldn't be so easy to steal a starship but if it were crewmembers who had the knowledge but were perhaps subject to the influence of said 'keeper' - we've done long distance mind control/influence before and would make the theft more plausible.
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Old 12-01-2009, 09:52 AM
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However, if it could be reconcieved so that perhaps simply another ship (Farragut?) takes his place that would involve them more directly.
You just want the green chick back and with a bigger part.
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You just want the green chick back and with a bigger part.
No - I quite happily killed her off in the last flick (still disappointed there was no windshield squish for her) but I just thought - since we're 'lifting' from TOS, it would be little link to Kirk's life in the Prime!
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He'd make a better character than Mudd.
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